Ryuzaki
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 3, 2008 21:24:18 GMT
[glow=yellow,2,300]I read yours and it would be awesome to have an editor. and instead of filling this site up i could just email you the storys to edit [/glow]
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Red Corsairs
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Post by Red Corsairs on Jan 3, 2008 21:29:48 GMT
sure, that sounds good
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Kelbar
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Post by Kelbar on Jan 4, 2008 1:08:45 GMT
Can Kelbar make an appearance? He's a Dwarf captain/lord who hails from The Blue Mountains in my army. Looking good so far. Perhaps a Battle on Caradhas for a major battle?
And of course I'm game to help with anything.
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Eomer
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Post by Eomer on Jan 4, 2008 4:52:22 GMT
You said before that you need a name for a warg chieftain. How about, ummm, Nurka? And for a battle, the same place where Bilbo, Gandalf and the dwarves went in, in the Hobbit. And I see that you got Grawp from Harry Potter RC.
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Post by Red Corsairs on Jan 4, 2008 6:58:32 GMT
Well Nurka is alright for a chieftain name but i think Grawp is better . And yes i did get it from Harry Potter . You mean the Iron Hills Eomer?
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Ryuzaki
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 4, 2008 21:01:06 GMT
[glow=yellow,2,300] okay i got most names down: ;D -Goblin rebel leader: Bizog -Goblin's partners: Zurgob and nimgeg -Dwarf king: Burin -Dwarf Captain: Kelbar -Kelbars Standard bearer: Darr -Warg Cheiftan: Grawk -Goblin rebel spy:kig[/glow] Since RC is going to be away for a while ill post my unedited chapters
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 4, 2008 22:41:15 GMT
[glow=yellow,2,300]HERE IT IS[/glow] ;D Chapter 1 Bizog had made this decision 3 weeks before, when Durburz had forced his regiment to attack the dwarf captain, Kelbar's army alone. Bizog had downright refused, causing Durburz to lock him in the dungeon for 10 days, and expect imediate forgivness. "Why we leavin" asked Zurgob for the fourth time after they left the mountain. They had been walking for over two hours now, Bizog, Zurgob and Nimgeg, with over one thousand goblins, and three trolls, snarling and bickering behind them. "I've told you three times already!" screamed Bizog at him. Bizog, unlike like most goblins, had quite a long temper. But even the most patient elf would start to get anoyed by the brutal half troll walking beside him. Zurgob was huge, at least twice as tall as Bizog, and three times as wide. He was a half troll, but any real troll could beat him in a battle of wits three times over. Not to say he wasn't usefull, sometimes his dumb, impulsive ideas helped path the way to victory. Also, no dwarf warrior, or even three together, could fight against him and win. "At least try to remember," snarled Nimgeg, walking on the other side of Bizog. Nimgeg was quite smalll even for a goblin, but that made able to sneak around extra well. He was the best goblin archer in Middle Earth, even some elves might lose out to him. And he was smart, not in the clever, strategic way of Bizog, but just in pure IQ. "STOP!" screamed Bizog so loud that the small army behind him all looked up. Zurgob and Nimgeg both were cowering beside him. Bizog had that aura about him that naturaly made others scared of him. "you smell that" he grunted. "Oh yes hehehe." snickered Nimgeg. Him and Bizog both said together, "dwarfs." [glow=blue,2,300]I dedicate this Chapter to RC because he gave me good names for the main caracters [/glow] [glow=yellow,2,300]Dont worry most of you will get a chapter [/glow]
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Post by Eomer on Jan 5, 2008 4:29:44 GMT
No, not the iron hills. That's away from where I'm talking about! I mean the Misty Moutains. I could help though Dur.
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 8, 2008 23:52:48 GMT
Chapter 2 And dwarfs there were, a scouting party of around three hundred was just over the hill in front of them. These dwarfs were led by burly war veteran Hegar, who had been in more battles then he would care to remember. * "Whats the battle plan?" enquired one of the goblins behind Bizog. This goblins name was Kig, he had been added to Bizog's army only a few weeks before. "Why dont we jus' charge in?" pied up another goblin called Firgob, "theres only a couple 'undred of 'em." Firgob had a better sence of smelll then any goblin in the army. "No... we can't aford to lose that many men if we ever plan to take moria for our own" Bizog said, "hmmmm. How many do you smell Figob?" " Its Firgob, and i reckon there three 'r four 'undred." "I see... Nimgeg, what is it" sked Bizog. Nimgeg had been coughing into his hand this whole time. "Well you see, if there only four hundred of them I could easily take out most of them with my archers," he suggested, "and then Zurgob could, HEY WAKE ZURGOB!" he screamed at the half-troll who had recently fallen asleep. "as I was saying, Zurgob and his trolls, could easily run in and take them out while we fire another volley at them." "Yes, yes, okay do it, but bring me there leader, now kill them all!" Bizog snarled as Nimgeg, Zurgob and roughly two hundred and fifty goblins ran off, followed by three trollls. Bizog turned and yelled to the rest of the goblins "Lads, get ready to FEAST!" [glow=yellow,2,300]This chapter is dedicated to uhhhhhh well *draws name out of hat* Bringerofchaos! because his name was drawn[/glow]
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Post by Red Corsairs on Jan 11, 2008 19:55:29 GMT
I'm sorry I haven't been around to edit your chapters. Thank you for dedicating the chapter to me . Anyway, I'll let you all know now if you haven't figured this out yet... I have a week on the computer and a week away so I will only be around half of the time. So Durburz when you send me each chapter (if your still having me as your editor) then I will get the chapter sent back to you as fast as possible .
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Ryuzaki
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 20, 2008 4:45:28 GMT
you will be a part time editor when your gone ill try myself, when your here ill pm them
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 20, 2008 23:46:31 GMT
Chapter 3
The battle wen't swiftly and smothly like Nimgeg had said, half of the dwarfs were deadbefore they knew what hit them. After the initial volley Zurgob and his trolls ran in and swiftly finished them off while the goblins took carefull aim not to hit there own men. Only one goblin had been lost and troll had lost one of his fingers. One dwarf appeared to have been ready for something like this to happen and had quickly fired an arrow and then drew his sword and slashed at the troll grabing him.
As this dwarf was being thrown onto his stomach at Bizogs feet, Bizog asked him "what is your name dwarf?"
"Cough cough Hegar, of the blue mountains." he choked out.
"Hegar, I have heard of you, the swiftest of dwarves," Bizog growled, glancing at the weapons in his hands, "you are the one that killed Firgob are you?"
"If you mean the goblin I shot, then yes, yes I did" Hegar stated.
"Ah I see, you amuse me, you talk as if you have chance at killing me," Bizog laughed, "You are the first who has not begged for mercy, begged for the mercy that would never come... Very well, i will let you go, go and tell your lord that he will fall to the goblins and his city shall be taken, and his people will be, slaughterd," He sneered the last word at the dwarf laying at his feet.
"The grat Kelbar will never be taken by this pathetic, ragtag army of lowly goblins. He will kill you all and will take your city, you are a fool." He was cut short by Bizog unsheathing his sword and running it through him.
"I give you the chance to live, to see your loved ones again, and you, you insult me, my men and my race, you are the fool." he ben't down and spoke softly but snering at the same time, "you will fall, and your people will be slaughtered." The dwarfs body finaly fell to the ground. "MEN take what you wish from the dead dwarfs." as he looked around at his men, he realised that Furgob was not the only one missing, another was gone as well.
[glow=yellow,2,300]Dedicated to Kelbar (even though his name should be enough)...[/glow]
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Kelbar
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Post by Kelbar on Jan 21, 2008 0:46:27 GMT
Cheers durburz. Anything you need, I can help. If you need edits, I can help with that as well.
Including me in this story is a great honor. Thank you for letting my character come to life!
Would you like a fan supplement to go along with this? I could try writing some scenarios and what not, as well as profiles. This is the perfect story for something like this.
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Post by Ryuzaki on Jan 21, 2008 1:11:28 GMT
sure, you could write a scenario for the last battle that happened and some profiles for hegar and kelbar, i call the goblins though
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Post by Kelbar on Jan 21, 2008 1:12:49 GMT
ok sounds good. I'll start it up in the house rule forum.
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